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作者:广州陈嘉庚纪念中学 张妮妮
时间:2009-01-20

下面是一份英语学习自我评价表,每个评价项目后有若干个选项。请在符合自己情况的选项方框中打√(可以多选)。根据你的选择,以My English Learning为题写一篇短文,介绍你英语学习中的优势与不足,并针对自己的不足之处提出改进方法。词数80左右。短文开头已经写好,不计入总词数。

【写作指导】

这篇文章是篇描述自己的学习情况的记叙文,由于是描述目前的情况,描述部分用一般现在时。而后面的改进方法则可以用will,should,can等情态动词。

这篇文章要点分五个部分,平均每个部分两个句子左右,所以每个部分的选项不要选太多,因为第五部分还要求提出改进的方法。第五部分可以写详细些,那么有些自己不是很有把握的要点则可以选择一句话带过,有所提及就可以了。

这篇作文并不难写,因为很多表达都在评价表里给了出来,但是同学们要注意的是要加上合理的开头和结尾,这才能使其成为一篇完整的文章,而不仅仅是罗列要点。题目已经给出第一句话了,为了衔接自然一点,最好还是再加上自己对英语的看法(喜好、水平等等),结尾可以表达一下期望和决心。

【习作例文】

English is a very important subject at school. I want to study it (1) well so I work hard. I can remember most new words. I like pair work best because I like to talk with my classmate in English. I think writing is the most difficult part in English learning. My writing need (2) to be improved. I think reading texts aloud is a useful way in English learning. I will read more English books and keep an English diary. I hope my English writing will become better and better.

【点评与评分】

这位同学的文章包含了所有要点,语法错误不多,有两个地方,一个是study it这个搭配不恰当,学英语我们最好用learn English。还有一个地方My writing need,作者忘了第三人称单数要加s,这里估计是粗心的缘故,因为这位同学的语言运用能力看起来不应该是不知道这个语法点。这个错误可以通过检查后得到更正。作者把评价表里面的顺序换了一下,把第三部分和第五部分放一起,使得文章看起来更连贯和流畅,但是在处理第四部分内容时,她可能找不到适合的解决方法,缺少必要的过渡,使文章显得有些突兀和不自然。

缺点在于,这位同学的语言变化不多,多数是套用了评价表里面的内容,不过她能比较准确地套对,说明她的语法基础不错。文章末尾better and better这个结构用得不错。

如果评分的话,总的来说,这是一篇介于一档和二档之间的文章。以总分为15分来计,如果是整体评,这篇文章是11~12分左右。

English Learning Self-assessment

1. The new words I can remember:

all most some several

2. My favorite activitie

pair work writing doing grammar exercise

learning new vocabulary class discussion

3. The most difficult part in English learning

reading listening grammar

vocabulary speaking writing

4. The useful ways in English learning:

keeping a vocabulary notebook

taking an active part in class discussion

doing English duty reports reading texts aloud

preparing lessons carefully before cla

5. Need to be improved in learning area

listening reading speaking

writing grammar vocabulary

pronunciation working with other

暑假即将来临,某校学生会打算在假期举行为贫困地区和受灾地区(disaster area)的孩子们奉献爱心的活动。请你用英语写一封倡议书,号召同学们,用力所能及的方式伸出援助之手,奉献自己的爱心。

要求:1.文中应包含:至少两种帮助方式,这样做的目的和意义。 2、词数80~100:短文的开头已给出,不计入总词数。

Dear schoolmates,

While we are sitting in our bright classroom, remember there are lots of children in the poor and disaster areas needing our help badly. Summer vocation is coming. Let’s do something to help them.

As students, _____________________________________________________________________

Students’ Union

June 13, 2008

【写作指导】

这是份倡议书,目的是号召人们行动,所以会经常用到can,may等表示建议的情态动词。要求是至少2种帮助方式以及其目的和意义。要求的篇幅是80~100词。根据这样的要求,最好选3~4种帮助方式比较好写。这样的作文如果是平时练习,在考虑帮助方式的时候,最好和同学一起进行brainstorming,可以拓展自己的思路。内容是关于帮助灾区的小朋友,所以有可能会用到donate这个词语。在文章的结尾要注意加上一句简洁有力的呼吁。

【习作例文】

Dear schoolmates,

While we are sitting in our bright classroom, remember there are lots of children in the poor and disaster areas needing our help badly. Summer vocation is coming. Let’s do something to help them.

As students, we are not making any money now, but we can give out our pocket money. The money may help them go to school again. They can also use the money to buy food and medicine that they need. Books and school things are also welcome by the children in disaster area. Books can help to heal their broken hearts. Of course, your care is also wonderful gift to them. Why not take up your pen and write to them? Be their friends and comfort their heart.(1) Help them go through the hard time. (2)

Come on and you’ll find the happiness of giving and caring.

Students’ Union

June 13, 2008

【点评与评分】

这篇作文是可以评为一类文的。从文章可以看出这位同学有较高的英语水平,也使用了一些非课标要求的词语,除了恰当地表达了所有的要点,还运用了各种不同的句式:陈述句、祈使句、反问句、定语从句等;使文章显得活泼生动,也符合倡议书的要求。值得一提的是,这位同学可能不知道donate这个词语,但是她灵活地运用了give out来代替,这也是可以的。

需要改进的是:文章中有些句子有生译的感觉,如 comfort their heart,有些句子如能恰当合并会更好一些,如(1)与(2)。有些句子意思重复,应注意语言的精练。

模拟训练

题目:My favorite invention

现在的科技日新月异,各种发明以及高科技产品成为了我们生活中不可缺少的东西,如电脑、笔记本电脑 (laptop)、手机 (mobile phone)、MP4、数码相机 (digital camera)、数码摄影机 (DV) 等。请描述你最喜欢的一种发明并说明理由(理由至少有两个方面)。词数在80词左右。

范文:

My favorite invention

Among all the modern inventions, laptop is my favorite one. I think it is the most amazing invention in the 21st century. Laptops are light and small. They are easy to carry. With a laptop, we can work, study and entertain everywhere. A laptop can get to the Internet outside, which enables us to get the latest information whenever we want. Using a laptop, I can keep in touch with my friends and family through e-mails and QQ at any time and in any place. I think in the future, everybody will have his or her own laptop.


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