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09高考书面表达范文诵读
作者:21ST
时间:2010-01-29

(北京卷) 假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华,为响应绿化祖国的号召,你班四月十二日去郊区植树,请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序,介绍植树活动的全过程,给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。

注意:词数不少于60 提示词:郊区 suburbs



专家范文

Green Action in Our Cla

April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering them. After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.

点评:在写作情景作文的时候,我们要注意合理利用题目要求中的信息。如果开篇直接翻译题目要求:“I am Li Hua from Hongxing High School. To answer the call of ‘green action for our nation’…”, 叙述就会显得生硬死板。Teens外国专家在此处先简要概括了自己对这次植树活动的总体感受。然后紧紧抓住画面展现的内容依次展开叙述。最后一段的合理联想,更为文章增色不少:Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment. 此外,同学们在欣赏文章的过程中,还要注意体会文中现在分词的各种用法,如:a board reminding people to protect trees等。

(浙江卷) 5月1日,高二(3)班的学生志愿者Li Yue 和 Zhang Hua 去阳光敬老院(Sunshine Nursing Home)开展志愿者活动(送水果、打扫、聊天等)。假如你是校英语报的记者,请按下列要点用英语写一则100–120个词的新闻报道。

1. 时间、地点、任务、活动;2. 老人们的反应;3. 简短评论。

注意:报道的标题和记者姓名已给出(不记词数)。

Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly

By Chen Jie, School Newspaper



专家范文

Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly

May 1 was a bright day. Li Yue and Zhang Hua, two students from Class Three, set out on a trip to the Sunshine Nursing Home to volunteer. The old people in the nursing home were pleased to receive fresh fruit from the two young volunteers and offered them great thanks. Next, the volunteers started cleaning the old peoples’ rooms. The two students changed the sheets, swept the floor and wiped the windows, clearing away all the dust and allowing the sun to shine brightly through the glass. After that, the volunteers sat down with the old people chatted with them until it was time for them to go. The elderly people thanked them again for all that they had done, but the volunteers just smiled gently. The heartfelt satisfaction of doing a good deed was the best reward for them.

By Chen Jie, School Newspaper

点评:审题时特别要注意:命题要求中包括老人的反应和简短评论。我们看到Teens外国专家在叙述事件的过程中,严格按照题目要求,并没有单独从志愿者们的角度介绍事情的经过,而是兼顾老人们的感受,叙述他们的反应。通过两者的互动,体现出了志愿者活动的积极向上的意义。文章结尾,专家用“The heartfelt satisfaction of doing a good deed was the best reward for them”评论了本次活动的意义,言简意赅。

(湖北卷) 假设你是华华,与英国网友汤姆约定用对方的母语通信,以提高各自的外语水平。最近你收到汤姆的电子邮件(附后),发现有一个成语使用不当。请根据下列要点,用英文回一封电子邮件。

要点:1.不应使用“无所不为”,应使用“无所事事”;2.说明这两个成语的用法;3.给予鼓励。

注意:1.词数为100左右;2.参考释义:无所不为– do all kinds of bad things 无所事事– have nothing to do; 3.除以上两个成语外,邮件中不得使用其他汉字或拼音;4.电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好(不计入你所写词数),但不得抄入答题卡。

附(汤姆的邮件):

华华,你好!

近几天在忙什么事?有什么有意思的事吗?我们的学校放假了,所以这几天在家无所不为,饱食终日,只好上网发伊妹儿。没意思。我决定找份工作,做个自食其力的人。祝好!

汤姆

(以下所给内容不得抄入答题卡)

Hi! Tom,

Nice to read your e-mail today. I notice you’ve begun to use Chinese idioms and used most of them correctly.



Hope you’ll find a job soon.

Huahua

专家范文

Hi! Tom,

Nice to read your e-mail today. I notice you’ve begun to use Chinese idioms and used most of them correctly.

Just one small correction: It looks like you’ve misunderstood an idiom. You used “无所不为” in your letter as a way to express that you were feeling bored. Actually, using this idiom is a way of saying that you have been doing all kinds of bad things, even though you know they are bad. I believe this was not your original intention! In this case, it’s better to use “无所事事”, an idiom that describes a situation in which people have nothing to do. Don’t you think so?

The good thing is that you are making impressive progress on your Chinese. Keep working and you may become an expert on China some day!

Hope you’ll find a job soon.

Huahua

点评:命题要求根据材料写作,所以首先要认真阅读给出的材料,即汤姆的来信,注意汤姆信中反映出的两人之前的亲密关系。注意专家在文章开头并没有生硬的指出“You have made a mistake”, 而是含蓄地说“Just one small correction”, 这与文章末尾肯定对方的进步的文字相照应,表述上也更加委婉。此外,同学们还要体会专家在文中是如何使用两个层次的定语从句,解释成语“无所事事”的。  

(安徽卷) 假设你正在参加全省中学生英语演讲比赛,请你针对有些父母经常翻看孩子日记或书包这一现象,写一篇演讲稿,陈述你的观点。

演讲稿的主要内容应包括:1.认为同学们不必为此苦恼;2.希望能够体谅父母的苦衷;3.建议与父母进行交流和沟通。

注意:

1.词数100左右;

2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;

3.开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。

Good morning, ladies and gentleman.

Some of us are having problems with our parents, as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries.

Thank you!

专家范文

Good morning, ladies and gentlemen,

Some of us are having problems with our parents as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries. They think their parents should respect their privacy and leave them alone. But I think being upset doesn’t help to solve the problem. Parents today hear many stories about teenagers getting into trouble. They probably check bags because they’re concerned about us; they don’t want us to be led astray. Instead of treating our parents as if they had no respect for our privacy we should talk to them. We should explain that we trust them, and we would like them to trust us. Some of us have a problem talking to our parents. Perhaps they could write their feelings in a letter. Remember, communication is better than confrontation.

Thank you!

点评:

写作要点中提到“希望能够体谅父母的苦衷”,在处理这一要点的时候,我们注意Teens外国专家列举了父母的“苦衷”,例如“Parents today hear many stories about teenagers getting into trouble”。同时还要注意专家处理建议部分逻辑严谨的表述:首先提出不要对抗而要对话的观点,然后建议那些不善于对话的同学写信,最后用一句精辟独到的见解结束全文:“Communication is better than confrontation”。


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